tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.comments2023-03-23T03:36:24.277-04:00My Middle YearsPatchihttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09097638657085263738noreply@blogger.comBlogger127125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-58774056075332020092016-04-11T11:15:54.935-04:002016-04-11T11:15:54.935-04:00Thanks for the comment. My brother needed tubes in...Thanks for the comment. My brother needed tubes in his ears when he was little. He talked as if he was underwater, and that was probably how he heard things. Patchihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09097638657085263738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-4719346743659376112016-04-10T21:09:12.066-04:002016-04-10T21:09:12.066-04:00I remember my brother was thought to be learning d...I remember my brother was thought to be learning disabled as a child when it turned out he couldn't hear. He had an operation and when he came home he kept telling us all to be quiet for a long time after. Glad you can hear things you didn't before!mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-3466250161291439762016-02-27T07:45:36.674-05:002016-02-27T07:45:36.674-05:00I read this in the contest by Charity Bradford and...I read this in the contest by Charity Bradford and while I'm not a YA person I really liked the beginning of it!<br />Well done and congrats.Bushmanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17578478269526006557noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-51025090002670027132015-06-04T19:34:30.906-04:002015-06-04T19:34:30.906-04:00Rawr! Welcome to #TeamTRex! Please send your first...Rawr! Welcome to #TeamTRex! Please send your first chapter, query, and synopsis to both me and Rachel (email: elizabethbriggsbooks@gmail.com and rachel.searles@gmail.com). We're excited to work with you!Elizabeth Briggshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14572251749088056704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-57014979697545914872015-06-04T08:44:46.056-04:002015-06-04T08:44:46.056-04:00THANK YOU!!! I'm so excited to be on #TeamTRex...THANK YOU!!! I'm so excited to be on #TeamTRex; I'm doing the Happy Dino Dance!Patchihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09097638657085263738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-586743147162471212015-06-04T07:45:28.984-04:002015-06-04T07:45:28.984-04:00I want you for my team!
Although I enjoyed your d...I want you for my team!<br /><br />Although I enjoyed your dinochicken picture, your entry was always on my short list! I love your concept and your interesting setting, and I think your writing is really strong. I have some ideas for how we can make it all even better and I can't wait to work with you!<br /><br />Welcome to #TeamTRex!Elizabeth Briggshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14572251749088056704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-54145955344207804482015-05-27T16:06:34.606-04:002015-05-27T16:06:34.606-04:00Thanks, Kurt!Thanks, Kurt!Patchihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09097638657085263738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-24426124628595277652015-05-27T16:01:23.004-04:002015-05-27T16:01:23.004-04:00great set up and opening. good luck!great set up and opening. good luck!Kurt Hartwighttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12857036723957923656noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-9233818064584014092015-05-26T09:41:05.223-04:002015-05-26T09:41:05.223-04:00Thanks, Rebecca!Thanks, Rebecca!Patchihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09097638657085263738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-19281506095406574702015-05-26T09:40:51.365-04:002015-05-26T09:40:51.365-04:00Thanks, Laura!Thanks, Laura!Patchihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09097638657085263738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-87268378797619644702015-05-26T09:40:37.286-04:002015-05-26T09:40:37.286-04:00Thanks, Annette!Thanks, Annette!Patchihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09097638657085263738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-79000319067747877412015-05-25T10:07:38.535-04:002015-05-25T10:07:38.535-04:00Sounds amazing! Good luck with the contest!
Sounds amazing! Good luck with the contest!<br />Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11231084362458618164noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-43304639133014941342015-05-23T11:55:28.707-04:002015-05-23T11:55:28.707-04:00Sounds so good! Best of luck!Sounds so good! Best of luck!Laura Rueckerthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12267281174937559086noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-15798422039817802862015-05-23T10:11:41.371-04:002015-05-23T10:11:41.371-04:00Good luck in the competition!Good luck in the competition!Annette T. Doddhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13153366966746537614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-4072235801717617492015-05-22T15:23:19.342-04:002015-05-22T15:23:19.342-04:00Thanks!Thanks!Patchihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09097638657085263738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-47851234058147776652015-05-22T15:20:57.652-04:002015-05-22T15:20:57.652-04:00I love the unique setting and that it tells a stor...I love the unique setting and that it tells a story of native populations invaded, but with a fantasy twist. good luck!kimcjohnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08950930157648425915noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-13923994876099223482015-05-22T14:36:03.707-04:002015-05-22T14:36:03.707-04:00Poor Sophia! I hope she makes it out! Good Luck!Poor Sophia! I hope she makes it out! Good Luck!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-32974808283362949622015-05-22T12:30:22.111-04:002015-05-22T12:30:22.111-04:00Thanks, Mia!Thanks, Mia!Patchihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09097638657085263738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-83289304584997499132015-05-22T11:54:53.958-04:002015-05-22T11:54:53.958-04:00I love your query letter. Sometimes it's hard ...I love your query letter. Sometimes it's hard to figure out why they start their journal. An arranged marriage she doesn't want is totally relatable. Good luck with the manuscript. Mia Lansfordhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03899558556091685030noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-54092253301361488362015-05-06T16:26:22.465-04:002015-05-06T16:26:22.465-04:00Your boys might like The Eighth Day series; it'...Your boys might like The Eighth Day series; it's geared toward boys who don't want much kissing :)mshatchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06308916014310536449noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-20328430277398911112015-03-02T16:15:40.833-05:002015-03-02T16:15:40.833-05:00Thanks, Natalie! I changed the first sentence to s...Thanks, Natalie! I changed the first sentence to see if things make more sense.Patchihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09097638657085263738noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-80782075323015326352015-02-20T16:04:08.182-05:002015-02-20T16:04:08.182-05:00This is great. I really like your story line. I wa...This is great. I really like your story line. I was confused by the second sentence and I'm not sure you need it at all. And I think you need to add a personal stake at the end as well as the stake for the tribe, like that she'll be forced to marry or whatever will happen to her. Fingers crossed for you that this results in you getting an agent.Natalie Aguirrehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03756087804171246660noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-19876606407668004382015-02-15T16:51:25.537-05:002015-02-15T16:51:25.537-05:00Loving this concept! The log line is very interest...Loving this concept! The log line is very interesting and concise. The query's stakes are a little lack luster. Is it a matter of her decision between fighting or looking for help? If so, that needs to be more clear.<br /><br />There seems to be a tad of back story clumped together upfront in the first 250. If you can find a way to spread it out in the next few pages, it would be better. Also, I'd love a bit more of the MCs voice in the pages.<br /><br />Hope this helps! Best of luck with this!E.G. Moorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16153333964618890260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-89451144365801670422015-02-15T16:40:58.616-05:002015-02-15T16:40:58.616-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.E.G. Moorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16153333964618890260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2078433955138263042.post-10755383137916702662015-02-15T15:23:27.817-05:002015-02-15T15:23:27.817-05:00Your queries are both intriguing. Other people hav...Your queries are both intriguing. Other people have mainly already made the points I've thought of - I found the sentence read about her childhood friend a little jarring, even though of course Gavin must be that friend. I also wondered how she would know about a goddess who no one else knew existed? Or is she just hoping there is one?<br /><br />I too wondered why just mingling would lead to marriage, or why she's worried about never seeing her grandmother again if she's only planning to steal back to her room at this point. Is her grandmother sick or just tired?<br /><br />Anyway, sounds like a fun world!Clara MacCaraldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17175779424666395372noreply@blogger.com